http://www.freebookexcerpts.com/2008/02/07/waltzing-australia-by-cynthia-clampitt/ Free Book Excerpts showcases excerpts from fiction and non-fiction books. Wed, 07 Dec 2011 23:26:47 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 http://www.freebookexcerpts.com/2008/02/07/waltzing-australia-by-cynthia-clampitt/comment-page-1/#comment-5 Alison Fri, 08 Feb 2008 16:52:03 +0000 http://www.freebookexcerpts.com/2008/02/07/waltzing-australia-by-cynthia-clampitt/#comment-5 Too many adjectives. I got to the start of paragraph three and stopped there. I guess the writer is trying to take the reader into the woods and into her soul. But she's trying too hard. She should use punchy verbs to 'show' rather than adjectives to 'tell' in order to bring this alive and let the reader see it through his or her own eyes rather than through the eyes of the author. Too many adjectives. I got to the start of paragraph three and stopped there. I guess the writer is trying to take the reader into the woods and into her soul. But she’s trying too hard. She should use punchy verbs to ‘show’ rather than adjectives to ‘tell’ in order to bring this alive and let the reader see it through his or her own eyes rather than through the eyes of the author.

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